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If you're going to write an essay, you might want to provide some transitional phrases between your facts, to help them flow together more cohesively. As is, it's a little choppy. You might try adding an introduction, developing each thought into its own paragraph with some additional contextual information to help set the stage, and then tie it up with a concise conclusion.

 

Until then, I'm giving you a D on this assignment. You have until 11:00 am to turn in your rewrite.

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In related news, the US is keeping up with the Dutch model of personalized government services. This summer, each US citizen will be issued a personalized debit card, with thier share of the US debt already debited from the card.

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